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Title: Slyphstorm - Pegasus Device
Post by: Marioland1 on November 23, 2013, 02:36:09 AM
Another Rainbow Factory-based song, and my favorite of them so far.  This just needs to be done, even if I need to get off my hide and do it myself.



Lyrics:
Deep in the pages of history
Lies a shadow hiding in a mystery
A late night story buried far away
Until it once again sees the light of day

And when the little colts and fillies turn out all lights
And tell a story of a factory as black as night
The luxury of rainbows comes at a price
Just ignore the screams, and don't think twice

You've proven to yourself and to all of us
That you're not fit to fly like a Pegasus
You don't even deserve those wings you bear
When you stand beside a legend, you don't even compare
All of the failures help to fuel success
In the bloody and visceral weather game of Chess
And just because you've disappointed you'll pay the price
Now accept your fate and die in the Pegasus Device

Phantom screams echo through the ruined facility
A horrible silence builds an eerie tranquility
The souls of many innocent fill the air
And the hope that they all died with scattered here and there

A mighty machine built within the wake
Of a long dead dream, little demon awake
The citizens sleep, never quite knowing when
The device will reawaken, hungry again

You've proven to yourself and to all of us
That you're not fit to fly like a Pegasus
You don't even deserve those wings you bear
When you stand beside a legend, you don't even compare
All of the failures help to fuel success
In the bloody and visceral weather game of Chess
And just because you've disappointed you'll pay the price
Now accept your fate and die in the Pegasus Device


I don't even remember my past
I don't remember who I used to be
I don't even remember my friends of old
I don't remember my destiny

My mane is purple and my coat is orange
What I've become? I have no idea.
I only know one simple thing
The name they gave me: Absentia

You've proven to yourself and to all of us
That you're not fit to fly like a Pegasus
You don't even deserve those little wings you bear
When you stand beside a legend, you don't even compare
All of the failures help to fuel success
In the bloody and visceral weather game of Chess
And just because you've disappointed you'll pay the price
Now accept your fate and die in the Pegasus Device

I don't even recognize your rainbow mane
When you hide it behind that mask of shame
You don't even deserve those wings you bear
You used to be a legend, a righteous mare
All of the failures help to fuel success
In your bloody and visceral weather game of Chess
And then you sit upon your throne and you roll your diamond dice
And you send us all to die in your Pegasus Device

In the Rainbow Factory, where fears and horrors come true
In the Rainbow Factory, where not a single soul gets through
In the Rainbow Factory, us failures pay our toll
Now I've awoken, and I'm taking back control
Title: Re: Slyphstorm - Pegasus Device
Post by: DeFazer on February 07, 2014, 09:19:30 AM
Agree.
Title: Re: Slyphstorm - Pegasus Device
Post by: Diponi on February 07, 2014, 01:57:18 PM
Dayumn, it's even got a pitch track and all. I'm gonna have this done before you can say 'moved into WIP'.

Eh, probably not that fast tbh
Title: Re: Slyphstorm - Pegasus Device
Post by: Smilley on February 07, 2014, 05:42:00 PM
Well then, let me oblige.
Title: Re: Slyphstorm - Pegasus Device
Post by: Diponi on February 08, 2014, 03:47:05 AM
Done and uploaded to cloud. Although I'll check golden notes, linebreaks and stuff sometime when I can actually sing

E: Btw, the overlapping at 3:37 is intentional; I figured it wouldn't hurt with freestyle notes. Although I'm not sure if it works as well in Performous/other engines...
Title: Re: Slyphstorm - Pegasus Device
Post by: Renard on February 08, 2014, 11:29:00 AM
Some parts seems a tiny-bit off-beat, but not by much. :)

Overlapping: it's better to avoid quirks as much as possible; I'd advise to remove the freestyle lyrics completely when they overlap with singing sections. Even a USDX update could break it.
I tried it in Performous, and the engine actually removes these freestyle notes on its own. Neat.

(I'm curious: what was that lyrics.nfo file you used?)
Title: Re: Slyphstorm - Pegasus Device
Post by: Diponi on February 08, 2014, 12:27:48 PM
I'll go over the song, probably gonna fix a million little things here and there... Removing the overlap's no problem.
And lyrics.nfo was just what I'd thrown into USC - corrected lyrics, maybe some syllabification. In case USC crashes or something. Wasn't really supposed to sync it, though.

>USDX update
Now that's just wishful thinking ::)

EDIT: Checked the song again, hopefully that fixed any issues. Also here's a link, per DeFazer's request: http://share.mylittlekaraoke.com/Uploads/SlyphStorm%20-%20Pegasus%20Device.zip (http://share.mylittlekaraoke.com/Uploads/SlyphStorm%20-%20Pegasus%20Device.zip)
Title: Re: Slyphstorm - Pegasus Device
Post by: Renard on February 13, 2014, 08:50:16 PM
Much better! Thanks for that update :D